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Old 04-05-2011, 10:48 PM   #1
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So please bear with me.

Okay, this will be a bit of a long post but I promise that there will be comics.

These past few weeks (months?) all I've been doing drawing-wise, is studying anatomy and lighting. It was becoming kind of a pain to kick my own butt so I'd draw. And I've had a webcomic project for ...ff.... 2-3 years? But still feel I'm not ready to attack it. I've been planning it, writing it, designing the characters and everything and... yeah. So, you won't be seeing that comic soon.

But! I decided that I needed to inject back some fun in my drawies. (Yes, drawies.) It's been quite some time that I wanted to do a sci-fi comic. One who would not be serious. AT.ALL. This will be it.

Now, before you see the pages, you have to keep in mind that I didn't plan ANY of it. I wanted to do something and not plan it. When I plan something I end up not doing it for a very long time so, I don't know where I'm going with that story until I come up with the thumbnail sketches of the next page, and I don't design the characters until they come into play.

Because of that, some of the character designs may change during the comic and that's perfectly okay with me (I hope it is with you), but they will still look "almost" the same. And I still don't know how I want to do this, so, first page has been inked by brush with ink washes; second page has been inked by micron pens and Faber Castell brush pens. It's an experiment.

Still, even if it's just to have fun, and I don't take it seriously, critics and comments are still very welcome.

Enjoy! (I hope.)

tl;dr : Comic!
EDIT: I just rescanned them because they weren't so clean. And I think I did a good job. I'm hiding the old scans in spoilers for the time being and putting the new scans in their place


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Old 04-06-2011, 10:07 AM   #2
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what the... hell... is a lampioneer?

DUUN DUNN DUNNNNNN

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Old 04-06-2011, 10:53 AM   #3
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Update soon-ish. Most probably tonight or tomorrow.
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Old 04-06-2011, 08:51 PM   #4
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Third page is done! This is mixed media, micron pens, brush pens and ink + brush.

ENTER THE LAMPIONEER!


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With his mighty moobs!


eDIT: NOT! I need to rework some parts. It'll be up in a half hour.

EDIt2: It's up now... but I think you saw it already... aw....
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Old 04-09-2011, 11:36 PM   #5
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I can dig the need to just start something. I did that a couple months ago and still haven't gotten around to doing anything with the first page I did the pencil lines for. It can be fun.

If this is an experiment, don't hesitate to get inventive with page layout. I notice that, in the first panel, you've got the thumb protruding from the box. I like that you're breaking that confinement, but I think you could execute it better. The thumb seems to be leaking out of the corner of the panel, instead of breaking out of it. So far, you seem to be sticking to some real basic rectangle layouts, which are fine in their own right, but you can really have fun with something this experimental.

On the second page, it looks like you started to delete some of the paper tone and then gave up. You should really take the whole thing out or leave the whole thing in, because it's very distracting and it makes the comic look half-assed.

I think the pages could use a little more TLC in general, as well. I know this isn't a serious project, but the backgrounds could certainly use some more attention. Especially considering only one panel in your first three pages seems to have one.

My favorite page is by far the third. Lovin' the hatching. I'd like to see more of that.

Good luck. Can't wait to see what you come up with next.
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Old 04-11-2011, 12:29 PM   #6
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Thanks a lot for the review. Yeah my background are half assed. I know that XD. I'll work on it for the latest pages. Yeah I had started removing the paper texture and then gave up. I just wanted to go draw the other page.

Sorry for the lateness of the next page, it's a really tough one, I changed the technique a lot. It'll be up probably by friday D:.

Edit: I really like my third page too XD.
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No problem, man. That's the beauty of a project like this. You can take as long as you want!
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Ok gaize! Page 4 is done! And it's not what I meant it to be!

I had meant to do a photocollage in photoshop and it would seem like my computer didn't like it, photoshop kept crashing and all so I decided to go back to brushes. Done on bristol paper with a brush and micron pens. I put a lot more work into the background and into defining the character so, I hope you guys likes it

PS: Which one do you think look better? The first one was scanned in in greyscale, the second in black and white. Both at 600 dpi (which is my default scanning resolution for all my things). What I hate with the greyscale, is the texture of the paper around the page, where it goes suddenly to rather overtaking and everywhere else is correct. And I definitely don't want to have to clean up every page with the eraser in photoshop, taking extreme care not to go over my lines D:. Helps me please.


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EDIT:Well it would seem the second one doesn't want to pop up for me, so I'll just let the link there just in case it suddenly appears...
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Old 04-30-2011, 03:47 PM   #9
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Wow I forgot to post this.

Here you go, fifth page !


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Old 05-03-2011, 07:07 AM   #11
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Soon-ish yes, I was gonna start working on that page today actually :P
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Here it is! "Page 6" ! (It's actually a comic strip, I wanted to experiment on that format)


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You know what? I'm wondering if my storyboard without the actual dialogue is funnier. XD
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Hellow fellow gents from the PK community!

I bring you the 7th page with an announcement! In the course of the following weeks, I will be building a simple website (using wordpress+webcomic) to host this thing! I intend to continue to do it for quite some times, since i'm having tremendous fun with it.

From now on, i'll try to upload a page every wednesday. (Tonight is special though )

VIOILA! (Not even trying...)


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Edit: This is the last of these comic strips pages for a while though, i'll be going back to the full page format on wednesday!
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Old 05-18-2011, 05:10 AM   #15
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Wednesday is the day when a new comic gets out! (Sing this)



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(Personnally I think it's my best page so far.)
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I like how the panels break up at the end, nice touch.

Keep on going!!
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Hey! It's wednesday! Time for a new page!



And do you know what? I'm 3 pages in advance
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Page ten! Woo!

Have fun. If there's people still reading it :P
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Wait, what? You can read these, too? This just keeps getting better and better!

Congrats on ten, count 'em, TEN pages!
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Wait, what? You can read these, too? This just keeps getting better and better!

Congrats on ten, count 'em, TEN pages!
Am I smelling sarcasm?

Not that I mind per se... :P
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